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Alexandra Carr-Malcolm, Archaic Torso of Apollo, breath, Buddhism, death, Don Paterson, poetry, Rilke, spiritual death, UK poet, Vajrasattva, Yorkshire poet
The second piece was based on, ‘Archaic Torso of Apollo’ after Rilke, translated by Don Paterson.
The idea was to include the line, ‘Now change your life’ either at the end or somewhere in the body of the poem.
Here was my attempt.
Now Change Your Life
I smell you in my dreams.
Elusive, exclusive,
to all realms,
but what of it?
Stoic indifference,
tantric magnificence,
eyes tantalise,
and plead,
“Now change your life”
before death slams the door
on opportunities scorned,
and breath is spent,
like a match.
© Now Change Your Life 19.03.2013
by Alexandra Carr-Malcolm
Rainer Maria Rilke (Photo credit: Wikipedia)
Worldly Winds 
really enjoyed this
Thank you very much – I enjoyed writing it 🙂
This is really great! Luv it! – Resa
Oh thank you – I’m really pleased that you liked it 🙂
Beautifully well written!
Oh thank you so much – this was written at a poetry workshop in a fifteen to twenty minutes time slot! S I am pleased it works!
before death slams the door
on opportunities scorned,
I love those two lines. A great poem.
Thank you 🙂
great piece!
the last two lines are superb:
“and breath is spent,
like a match.”
Thank you dear friend 🙂
Pleasure 🙂 have a great day!
very well written indeed. great ending lines too.
groetjes, Francina
Thank you!
Alex
🙂